I had Chun in my head at the time and a bunch of markers in my hand. the result is this. done on a comic board page.
First off, you need to work on your anatomy.that seems to be the largest area you need work in. The shoulders are a bit broad and the jaw line is off. Also, It helps the head if you don’t put a bold line separating the jaw and neck. Try to use a variation in tones instead. Otherwise, nice work. Hope some of this helps you.
thanks for the comments, im trying to get better. I’ll work on what you mentioned.