I wrote this when I was 16, short and sweet, I still love it!


#1

Creeping unforgiven, trotting undisguised…
Transcending truth and wisdom, is the bellow of the lie.


#2

Sweet!!! I think its missing the ending, unless it’s haiku form.Either way Good job


#3

That actually is very good. Terse and effective…I like the abstract nature of it and the lyrics flow beautifully. Hopefully you decide to leave it as is and never opt to tamper with it.

-SynikaL


#4

Kinda late but thanks for the comments guys. Much appreciated :slight_smile: